Teh Wozzinator

Haha, I really have nothing to say that others haven't. This was really interesting, and it flowed very well. One thing that I don't agree with (no offense meant) is ...

Your rhyming was good, and the poem was okay... Rhythm problem: "Make the right choice. For now I hold the biggest voice." Way off. Change this somehow... Your rhyming is ...

Oh, how true of humans... Make a super-deadly weapon and then sell it to other places so that you can make some money and they can kill your population. They ...

Ahhhh!!! That's it?? I need more! You've got me hooked now. Sorry I don't have much more critique than that. I was to involved in the plot and her feelings ...

That was... really awesome. It seemed a little bit weird the way you wrote it, and some of your rhymes seemed a tiny bit forced, but there didn't really seem ...

I have to say that I liked this. Your rhythm wasn't bad, and I liked the way that it was written. The only line that I thought didn't flow at ...

I liked this, but there were a few grammar mistakes that I don't have time to point out right now. You might find them yourself. I really like this story ...

My edits in bold this is my first attempt at writting a horror novel,so i hope you like the first chapter, if not don't hesitate to crit. Enjoy! They Go ...

No time to talk, but one thing I wanted to say was that you did a really good job... Well, I think so... I'm a guy too, so I'm not ...

I don't think that there was really any rhythm, which doesn't make it much of a poem. It was okay, but not great. Um...pretty much do what everyone else said, ...

Oh my gosh! This poem was hilarious! Sorry I don't have time for a good review right now, but I just wanted to say that this rocks!! Lol... I seriously ...

Oh no!! I didn't notice this early enough. Hmm I do believe that this is the Mutt, is it not? So now I get to figure out how he feels!! ...

The only thing I like here was "psychotic and mortifyingly moronic". XD That was hilarious. Other than that... It wasn't very good. Your repetitions were...annoying. The rhythm was terrible. And ...

Hey... Sorry, I seriously haven't had time for a good edit recently, but one thing I did notice was that in "Derrin’s next sweeping blow, sent Sillon’s sword flying." you ...

My edits in bold. Iongo (ine-goo) Teslarhi (tess-lar-ee) Tell me what you think. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- King Iongo knelt down to the grub